How do you write the opening paragraph of your essay? There is no second chance at a first impression, and so the introduction of your essay serves an important role in establishing the strength of your Extended Essay.
Together with your supervisor or candidate, read the three introductions provided below. What elements do they have in common? How do they follow a similar patter?
What elements do the three introductions have in common? Here are 3 slides that annotate the second introduction on English A. Where do you see similar elements in the first and third introductions on SEHS and Design Technology?
The Extended Essay is a 'reasoned argument' (Criterion C). In the English-speaking world, there is a essay-writing tradition of stating your main claim at the end of the introduction. This is called a 'thesis statement'. Notice how the thesis statements from the 3 introductions below, do the following three things:
- answer the research question,
- outline the scope of the essay,
- make a claim or argument.
|Research questions||Thesis statements|
|‘To what degree are single-length irons (SLIs) effective for both high- and low-handicap golfers?’||n fact the research shows that both high- and low-handicap golfers made incremental improvements with SLIS in terms of accuracy and distance. In other words, Bryson DeChambeau is on to something.|
|How do the authors of Brick Lane, The Inheritance of Loss and A Passage to India comment on cultural conflict by depicting characters in romantic relationships, friendships and family relationships?||As this study of the novels and their characters will show, E.M. Forster, Kiran Desai and Monica Ali suggest that cultural conflicts are best overcome through broader definitions of identity, mutual respect for differences and more sharing of power in multicultural settings.|
|'How can the canteen at our school be redesigned to efficiently and effectively accommodate for current demands?’||It will be shown that moving the fruit bar, introducing automated signs and managing a tighter timetable would contribute to a more effective and efficient canteen that can accommodate for current demands.|
Write your introduction before writing your essay. Then write your essay. Then re-write your introduction. Some students prefer to write their introduction last, which is also acceptable. But by writing a rough draft of it early, you will have a sense of focus during the essay writing process.