Read the following stimulus text, guiding question and the student's response. Apply the P1 assessment criteria and discuss the marks that you would award the script before reading the examiner's marks and comments. How different were your marks and comments from the examiner's marks and comments? What improvements could be made to this student's response, in order to achieve better results?P1 Stimulus text: Men's Health
Paper 1 assessment criteria SL/HL
Examiner's comments and marks
Notice: one of the main differences between the student response and the model response is the strength of argument. The model response is more convincing because it uses if-then logic to suggest that the magazine cover is bad for society and men's health. What's more, it equates form to meaning. For example: strong fonts are used to suggest that men should be strong.