The following HL Essay aims to answer the line of inquiry:
Read the essay carefully. Apply the HLE assessment criteria and discuss the marks you would award the script before reading the examiner's marks and comments. How different were your marks and comments from the examiner's marks and comments? What improvements would you make to this essay to achieve better results?Poor HL Essay on Othello
Examiner's comments and marks (poor HLE)
Good HL Essay on Othello
Examiner's comments and marks (good HLE)
What's the role of secondary sources on the HL Essay? Both the poor and the good essay have secondary sources. Compare the bibliographies of these essays. Clearly, the better essay cites more relevant sources. In other words, make sure that your sources are actually about the primary source and not just about cultural phenomena.